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Chapter One: The Period
Dnesni den byl fakt dlouhy a unavny. Do pul druhe rano jsme s Jen pracovaly na An Adventure With Dickens, coz, pokud se na to podivate a pokusite (pisu zamerne pokusite) precist prvni kapitolu v originale, zjistite, ze je to vazne tezke. Zaslo to dokonce tak daleko, ze jsme dekovala Marte, ze mi nedovolila vzit si jeden predmet navic nez ostatni a diky tomu jsem mela vcera volny blok - dodelavala jsem Dickense. Pres obed - dodelavala jsem Dickense. Moje odpovedi na AP fyziku jsem zvladla nacmarat za patnact minut a byla smirena, ze neprojdu quizem, protoze jsem se neucila. Joseph nam dvou studentum AP fyziky ale nakone ctest nedal, chybel totiz nas treti a posledni student, Joon (byl s ostatnimi seniory na Michigan Tech). Docela jsme se zamotali do jednoho problemu okolo rychlosti zvuku a volneho padu - ano, souvisi to spolu XD.
Jinak dnesni Revolution me nejvic zklamala. Pridalo se k nam nove nekolik dalsich studentu, kteri ani o tenhle predmet zajem nemaji, coz fakt nechapu, proc tam jsou, kdyz je to nejtezsi predmet na skole (spolu s AP English, pokud mate tu smulu a dostanete Sama). Zacinam se bat sveho rozvrhu, protoze priblizne polovina mych hodin jsou skutecne hodne tezke a jsou vedeny spis jako self-study, takze trochu nestiham. Dokonce jsem i uvazovala, ze necham revolution, protoze po prichodu Vannesy a zvlaste Iany je to priserne… Mohla bych misto toho mit klasickou literaturu a AP makroekonomii, kazdopadne dneska je posledni dne, kdy si muzu zmenit rozvrh a uz se mi nechce zpatky do LAB.
Rana jsou tu chladna, ale odpoledne je naprosto nadherne. O vikendu jsme spontanne skocili do jezera, Chad nas malem zabil. Moji pratele byli se Stefanem na tubingu, my jsme vyrazili na kolech do Land O’ Lakes. A celou nedeli jsem stravila u Tary a delala veci do skoly. Doufam, ze tam budu travit co nejvic vikendu, je to prijemna zmena oproti skole.
Jinak tohle je jedna z veci, co jsem napsala do sveho Literature and the Writing Process. Slo o to, vymyslet nejdriv velmi silnou pocatecni vetu a pak jsme to dopisovali jako kratky pribeh. Kdo najde chyby, tomu velmi podekuji… Mimochodem, musim se pochlubit, vyhrala jsem s tim ve tride XDD.
The snow was falling down on his shoulders and everyone was quiet, when he said in whisper: “I have done it.”
It was freezing and his voice was cold and caused that everybody felt uncomfortable. The small village was just couple minutes far away but they could not see it anymore because of snow and fog. There was something in the air; maybe it was just the change of temperature or Ismail might have felt the change of time but something was suddenly different – most likely it was just Mali’s whisper which had broken the silence that caused the change.
“That’s all. We should go,” said Mali and made the first step in the fresh snow. The moon was almost above the horizon and everyone seemed much older in its unnatural light. Mali had just turned 14 and he was the second oldest in that group after Ismail. This was his first time but he was more tired than excited. He made the others continue in walking even if they were so slow because of high snow and even that they could barely see in the compact fog all around. As they went on towards the village the innocence of the snow was invaded; red droplets fell down and colored the snow in all hues of pink. The dead fox’s body was far too heavy for little kids; however, Mali and Ismail kept struggling through consistent snow, draggling its body in spite of their exhaustion.
They arrived to the village late that night; cold and tired. Ismail watched the gory rut in the snow. He was old enough to know that once in a while this blood is not from a killed animal. He was not old enough to deal with it wherefore he quietly cried that night in the sounds of celebration – most importantly, they had enough meat for the next three days.
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Srpen 28th, 2008 at 6:14 am
Chtělas najít chyby, tady to máš. :) Líbilo!
* “everyone was all quiet” - bez all
* “maybe can Ismail felt” - maybe Ismail could feel, i když lepší by bylo Ismail might have felt.
* “which had broken the quite” - quiet, quite znamená docela. I když lepší by tu bylo silence.
* “in a fresh snow” - sníh je nepočitatelný, nemůže tam tudíž být “a”. Mělo by tu být “the”, protože je to konkrétní čerstvý sníh.
* “in its unnaturally light” - unnatural. Unnaturaly je příslovce.
* “after Ismail he was the most oldest in this group” - jen the oldest! Buď se přidává -(e)st nebo most, nikdy ne obojí. Ale napsala bych spíš, že he was the second oldest in that (je to v minulém čase) group after (tou předložkou si nejsem jistá, ale snad je to dobře) Ismail.
* ” He made the rest to insist on walking” - nejsem si jistá, co jsi tím chtěla říct. 1. po made se nepíše “to”, takže před insist by nemělo být “to”. 2. Tohle znamená “donutil ostatní (hodilo by se tam spíš the others než the rest), aby trvali na tom, aby šli dál. To se mi moc nezdá, takže je to opravdu to, cos chtěla říct?
* “in despite of” buď jen despite něco, nebo in spite of něco.
* “their fully exhaustion” - 1. fully je příslovce, 2. vynechala bych to.
* “He was not old enough to deal with it wherefore he quietly cried that night in the sounds of celebration” - wherefore?
Srpen 28th, 2008 at 12:15 pm
Dang: Ah, jsi zlata, dekuju moc. Ty prislovce jsem si uvedomila, kdyz jsem to odevzdavala. Nicmene vsechno ostatni mi uniklo, ale ted, jak jsi to napsala, tak to tam uplne vidim, takze strasne dekuju, ze jsi si s tim dala praci =).